Allen Kline 🚬

The quote: “Aris waited until the groundskeeper turned around the bend of the carriage way to break the window.” Above a series of images: a forest canopy, a student by the river in a historical city, a shelf of oddities including animal skulls, someone in a dress shirt and vest, a forest, a large animal skull, people holding cups and cigarettes around a table, and a notebooks with sketches of a skeleton.

NAUSICAA x WILL OF THE MANY

After conjuring the ghost of bone magic's inventor, university student Aris attracts the attention of an undead professor who would kill to keep the secret of magic's origins buried.

👻 #GhostPit #A #F #LGBT

Thank you again for all your help! 🙇

Here’s my #agentsguide for BAD THINGS, a 77K-word YA Psychological Thriller.

Thank you so much! After reviewing, I also realized I forgot to take out his name! Hoping my revised version is more concise.

When a grieving son starts seeing his mother's ghost, the enigmatic stranger who helps him cope also threatens to draw him further from his family and his grip on reality.

a cartoon character with a scarf around his neck and a black mask on his face ALT: a cartoon character with a scarf around his neck and a black mask on his face

Versus me spiraling every time I submit a query. Lol!

Yes! I plan on entering my YA Psychological Thriller/Horror! After editing for nearly two years, I feel like it’s time I get a fresh pair of eyes on it. Mine are tired.

Honestly, SAME. I was just workshopping mine for the trillionth time this afternoon. But it’s my first #RevPit, so I’m taking it as a learning experience if nothing else. 😂

Do you have a logline? I’m very interested in the premise based on your moodboard!

If I had to comp songs id say EoO by Bad Bunny meets Off to the Races by Lana Del Rey
Mood board : La Reina, the Haloed Heir, and Stolen Stars

Nightmare before Christmas meets Assistant to the Villain

YA Thriller BAD THINGS

⛓️ TROPES ⛓️
Unreliable narrator
Teenage rebellion
Coming-of-age
Mental health
Fragile family dynamic

When a grieving son starts seeing his mother's ghost, the enigmatic stranger who helps him cope also threatens to draw him further from his family, and his grip on reality.

Moodboard. Centre image is a pressure cooker with "CHEMPORTAL" written across it. Outer images clockwise from top left: - fancy drinks and food on a table set for 2 - typed text on a page of a book. "Chemistry" is highly visible - a white woman with brown hair working on a car engine - the Toronto skyline - a colourful stack of books - a bright light shining through a partially open door, obscuring the world beyond - a bat hanging from a branch - a stack of latkes

If Andy Weir and Ali Hazelwood co-wrote a book, it would be ChemPortal.

The love story:
🥸Mistaken identities
💕Enemies to lovers
🫣Awkward MCs
💬Witty banter
💪Family & found family

The sci-fi:
🌎Alternate Earth
🌾Impending famine
🥼Synthesize ammonia
💥Explosions
🧪Real chemistry

#RevPit #AmQuerying

Killer moodboard. Love the colors and song choices.

Nailed the Nightmare Before Christmas vibes.

Hi Leah, hope it’s not too late to ask a question! First I wanted to say I also edit marketing materials as a day job. I saw you mentioned interest in confident and competent MC’s. Would I be correct to assume you’d not be interested in an MC struggling mentally/ dealing with hallucinations?

Hope everything is well! A bummer, but looking forward to next year! Thanks for letting us know.

‘siren of dread’ is 😩✨

Way to hook us. 👀

March 10th #WIPSnip is “chapter,” subbed for “part.”
#writingcommunity #writingprompts #writersky #writesky

The #revpit submission window opens THIS WEEK!

From March 12 at 12 p.m. EDT to March 15 at 12 p.m. EDT, you'll be able to submit your manuscripts. Visit reviseresub.com to see what you'll need so you're prepared come Friday!

#writingcontest #writingcommunity #amwriting #writersofbluesky

Essentials for Writers: Loglines In 2022, we started asking for loglines as part of the submission process for the RevPit Annual Contest. Because this was new to the contest and a lot of the authors in our community weren’t …

Hey #RevPit, have logline questions or want some feedback on your logline? Reply here, and I’ll get to as many as I can.

Logline explanation: www.jenichappelleeditorial.com/post/essenti...

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Hi Jeni, still playing around with different variations of my logline. I'd welcome any feedback! 🙂

When a grieving son begins seeing his mother’s ghost, he meets the only person who can help him cope — but the further Sammy’s drawn from his family, the more the edges of reality begin to blur.

I won't have to worry about a hard pass then! I've been editing this manuscript for a few years now, and I really want to give it the love and care it deserves. Excited for what's to come over the course of the next few weeks during Revpit! Thanks again! 🙂

Thanks for joining. This will be my first Revpit! Really looking forward to pitching my YA Psychological Thriller to you! It nails a lot of the interests you listed on your MSWL, and I think we'd be a great pair. 🤞 As an editor, is there anything that makes a manuscript a HARD PASS for you?

Thanks for the heads up, looking forward to it! 👏

Stumbled upon your account and I’m really loving what I see. The dialogue here is so natural and doesn’t feel stiff at all. I could imagine it playing out in my head so well. Nice!

3/5: destroy -> destruction. this is one of my favorite dialogue exchanges #WIPSnips

Over the next few weeks, I visited Marc at least once, sometimes twice, a week. I always brought him something to eat and something we could do together; things like Uno, Trouble, and Simon. I brought a deck of cards and destroyed him in Spit, then let him “teach” me how to play Poker. I was enjoying it too much to admit I was the reigning champion of the late-night strip Poker tournaments they’d held in the dorm room below mine back in college. He seemed like he needed a win and it fit with the theme there seemed to be going: what people didn’t know wouldn’t hurt them.

Today’s #wipsnips word is “destroy”. #writingcommunity #writingprompts #writersky #writesky

March 5th WipSnip “destroy" subbed for “destroyed.”
#WriteSky #WritingCommunity #WritingPrompts

I’d say it’s a YA voice closer to CG Drews rather than traditional YA, but thank you for your honesty! I appreciate it.